Broken On The Bathroom Floor

Very clear and well written and stuff strong emotions its amazing.

5/5

I love this hun i can picture it all which is kind of good but unfortunate if you no what i mean? 5/5 though it was defintly a good write xox

Hey! Hats off to you for how much emotion was shown in this poem, the feeling really got through strong -and that's a really hard thing to maintain. However, if you don't mind me saying - I would like to share my opinion. I think the reason that the score on this certain poem isn't as high as the others you have, is just the rhythm and rhyme involved in it. Some parts were alright and I could see where you tried to rhyme, but your rhythm was broken up. For example, the first few lines :
No one understands these emotions,
No one knows my pain,
No one has tried to listen,
And I got tired of repeating my answer again and again

The last line is just too long to blend in with the others and to rhyme well with 'pain'... I hope you see what I'm trying to point out. Feel free to disregard that though, being as a writer writes only to impress themselves, if you are happy with it - than don't change a thing :). Great emotion though, you get extra points for that ;). I hope to see some more, keep up the good work!

I like your poem, it flows well, and I can picture it all, but why is it that your broken down for the second time?

Hey I really liked your poem although there are some rhythmical unevennesses. That's why you get only 4