Loveless Spell

by Puerto_Rican_Chick   Dec 29, 2005


Im feeling his hand slip out of mine,
the warmth of my body, it starts to decline.
losing the love that my heart once held,
slipping under this loveless spell.
all that who loved me now run away,
cause im so dead love cant seem to stay.
i feel sadness, emptiness, loss.
darkness... my heart tries not to cross.

its not done... i feel like it needs more. what do you think???

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  • 18 years ago

    by ~lost*and*lonely~

    It was a great start i think it needs aliitle more and when you're finish it will be a wonderful poem and thanks for the comment i was in a hurry i didnt notice i messed up so thank you

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Brilliant start. you should defantly keep going with it becuse i'm sure its going to turn out great

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    All around excellence is all I can say AWESOME DARK POEM

  • 18 years ago

    by & i still ♥ him

    Its a great poem... i think u should continue it cus it'll be even better ^.^ good luck, tell me when ur done, cus i def. wanna check it out

  • 18 years ago

    by Katlynn

    I like it so far. For you idea if you need some just write down everything that goes along with this poem and then pick some ideas from it and just throw it all together to me i don't care how the poem comes out i'll just write and write until whenever but anyway i hope something works out for you and let me know when you have finished because i would love to read it. keep it up. keep on writing. you have some talent. love always and forever.

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