It doesnt rhyme but w/e i did my best n' its how i feel bcuz my papa raised me n' im 16 now i turned 16 in december n' he meant the world 2 me n' he died in october at the age of 55 i miss him so much R.I.P. Papa (Paul Picard) i love you

Its not badd
keep it up
you had alot of emotions in it !
niice i know how you feel...i;ve lsot a lot of people close to me.

It doesnt have to rhyme to bring out the meaning. though some parts do. i like how you wrote this. it was like a tear for every word. 5/5