I can relate there, good job

I can relate there, good job

Have you ever let yourself break down in public, half realizing your doing it to see if anyone notices? People are too caught up in their own life to ketch a simple tear, or frown.

A while ago I decided I'd be willing to give up my life so some one else could live. Even the person I hate the most deserves a chance to live their life, and I wount feel guilty about not helping them later. It'd be the type of thing that eats me up inside. I'd jump the bullet for anyone, that's part of my weakness I guess.

Great poem, once again my life has been pulled out and displayed by a good peice of writting, it happens.

Good poem.. but i think the ending could use a little.... working on...? hope you dont mind that creative criticism. Thank you for the comment i appreciate it

~David