Heya huni
i love this part of your poem
its so hard
but I'm trying
I'm still hanging on
I'm beating life back with a stick
I just hope it doesn't break.....

it was an interesting lay out, i like it actually, u rote it well, well done, there was a sense of unknown pain. Good work
xxxxxxx

I love that omg that so good, it would be nice to have a man you can trust and just have someone else so you can live on..

You've got a great thought line, which I can tell you, I’m feeling the same right now! You have an interesting style of writing and I admire your lack of rhymes because a great deal of poets don't rhyme well, they make it like everyone else’s or it doesn't make sense. My first suggestion here is, especially in a poem like this, you need some more punctuation (remember when your talking to someone the way you say it can be just as meaningful as how you say it and it also makes it easier to read). Secondly I would test out some more imagery in your words, you don’t need to but it can enhance the feeling, meaning and can make it truly original, however, that’s completely up to you.
Best of Luck, a Good Write!
--Broken.