Good poem i agree with suicidal it sounds good but you need to try an make it flow better

Thxs for the comment you left on mine.. I really liked this one, I don't know about you but writing about pain seem so much easier than writing about haapiness, atleast for me neway. But keep writing, your still young but from what I see you have endless potential!

Richard

Wow! great stuff you write! keep up the great work your reall talented!!!
and thanx for checkin out and commentin on mi poems!
love jess XxXxXxx