Wo.. this is pretty powerful i gave you a five... but the ending kinda makes me a lil angry... i hope that if this is true for you you didnt tell your mother she isnt a mommy of yours... she may have hurt you and she may have taken something special away from you, but she's doing it becuase she thinks its best... shes raising you by what her parents taught her and what she knows... dont blame that on her.. shes doing the best that she can with what she was given... shes your mom and she always will be... just remember that if youd ont remember anything else ive told you
amanda

Wow! that is wonderful Im glad you told me to read it. It has alot of saying in it..that you will love him no matter what nor no matter who gets in the way. Although she is your mom and she is just watching out for you. Love your work hun.

Julie

Very interesting. It's like it's not your mother anymore, it's like she turned into another person and not letting you see him. But hunni, this was an amazing job and hopefully everything is going good. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

ps: thanks for the comment means alot.

Wow this is very emotion.. and its true even though some times parents think they are doing what is best for you sometimes it doesnt work out... this poem definatly expresses that emotion. I hope things work out for you but remember sometime an age gap doesnt matter but sometimes it does.. I'll just leave you to think about it.. Thank you for the comment on my poem I really appreciate it a great deal, and I really love the way this poem was written I can feel your frustration.

Hmm i really liked this poem... it was very strong and powerful.. the only thing i can suggest to you is that you kinda overused the word mommy... which made it almost meaningless at the end of your poem... other than that you did a very nice job...

sammie