Hey, that was pretty good. I liked the techinique of repitition and how you developed the story with age, as the little grew up and understood a little bit more and stuff. It was a good read. I've got one sort of like it, not quite but the dad does end up going out of the picture. So I can relate to it. Nice job :)

I like it, the flow was a bit stuttered though but Im sure when you read it it has the proper pattern...same with mine. It demonstates alot of emotions and is pretty powerful. Good job...

Aw sad i never knew my dad so this poem kinda makes me wanna cry. but anyways good job i liked it.

Ur poems are really powerfull, very good!! ur coming on my favorits list**

Its great... a lot of broken families cos of the parents' egoism! well done...