by Avrii Monrielle Jan 3, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Tired of just living, breathing |
by Polly
Wow really good poem. you have a lot of talent, keep writing i will read more of your poems when i have more time |
Great peice, very descriptive and full of feeling. very deep and strong |
by Vegetable
Oh I can really relate. I experienced this exactly after I broke up with my first boyfriend, it was unreal and I was in denial. This is very true, my only suggestion is that in the line "That door of past ajar" you might want to put "the" infront of past, because with out the article it makes past seem like an adverb to ajar which doesn't make any sence. But other than that Great work. |
by JL
Wow im speechless. Beautiful, you have so much talent. |