This is really powerful.. the words are really.. well they get in your face.. which is really good... but im not sure what you mean by some of it.. like the second to last stanza... we all??? that confuses me.. so if you decide to edit it do something with the way the sentences or lines are put together...
good job tho
amanda

This one is ok but its not my favorite

Wow, excellent. is it true? i hope not. thanks for the comments on my poems. they really mean a lot to me. stay strong,
**lisa**

Wow this is excellent. i love it too bits!!
thnx 4 commenting on my work. it made my day:P now work dont seem so painful to go 2 *shakes fist* damn cafe...
on a happier note well done this is really well written
keep it up
luv amy