That's a really interesting structure, I like it a lot. The poem itself is amazing, as is to be expected, very dark and well written. I hope to see more.
*VioletRaven*

What can i say...
cool format, different, i havent read one like this before... i think it was awesome and good job for another great poem. you truly out did your self again. =D (smile big) 5/5 great work!!!

Revo` Chick!!!

Fantastic!! i absolutely loved it. it flowed great and i love that you used a different style of poetry. great word selection too. xoxo

Oooh, I like this. Your attention to detail is what makes this piece simply flawless. So eerie...
Take care and keep it up~Holly

Nice!! I liked the way it's written 5/5

P.S.: Thanks for the comment on "Chrysanthemums scent" :)

The wording cool and the flow great...Really strange yet really cool. Nice.
~Fallen

I dnt no if u no this but lucifer actually means bringer of light - from when he was an angel blah blah... if u keep that in mind it works as well.. good structure.. works well..

Cool! cool way to format it, but odd. i can't do that. i don't think that hurd. it have a good rythme.:)

Very original poem. Deep and very vivid with the imagery. The play with words was amazing! Great job! 5/5