AMAZING! brilliant flow, style, concept, your imagery is flawless. some very familiar experiances here, you've captured the concept perfectly. its just amazing. keep it up!

You are freaking amazing, that is probably the best poem ive ever read.

I cant beleive how good this is. i jsut cant. i need to reread it. this is by far the best poem ive ever read. i cant tell you how talented you are.

I cant beleive how good this is. i jsut cant. i need to reread it. this is by far the best poem ive ever read. i cant tell you how talented you are.

Thanx for the suggestuian this is a really goooood poem ttyl

Its well written. Obviously it looks like your angry with God. I just want you to know...that he does love you and even if you think that your abanonded your truly not.

Ive always loved the poems you wrote.Keep up the good work.It is incredible how one person could write something like that!!!

WOW!!! really powerfull stuff!! great work!!!!!

You did an awsome job with this poem. Just wondering, are you recruiting for the dark one? I'm a soldier for hire, lol. Anyway, flawless poem and I'm putting it in my favorite poems list. :)

Wow. simply amazing.

I love it! Very powerful and deep. You just blew me away :) Good job. This one is definetly going on my favorite list.
5/5
~Kitty

It's interesting to fool the crowd.. Ditto Katie, you said it all. The jamboree, easily thrills.

Oh wowwwyyy kazooowyyy....

I love this poem...

Let me start with the title... It is excellent. Caught my attention with less than a second. It's a creative title.

This poem is nice, quite unique, dark and very descriptive. Please do not mind, my choice of words is not good......

I love how you start the poem by saying that you are in pain paying for all of your sins. You hope for mercy which you thought was what god's did give to their loved ones but they just leave you to rot....

So you leave that path of God and walk with the evil darkness and you are the reason for the fall of the heaven above...

What a wonderful poem.I love your choice of words. Almost each paragraph of yours had that one line which I absolutely love. I kinda right now wish why can't I write like this.... It is dark and beautiful. I would like to mention those lines I love....

Let the ash fall to the earth
And burn into my skin
* what a description. Although I didn't understand by ash you meant gods mercy or God punishment but I'm assuming it's the punishment.

My soul is trapped in emptiness
* I've never read such a beautifully written line. This line of yours is remarkable.

God's supposedly forgiving
* here you say that God is known to be forgiving but this is not what you are experiencing.... So well written.

He leaves their tainted souls to rot,
*love how you wrote this... God who is said is forgiving is not and just leaves you to rot in that something of darkness.

I etched another tale.
*I love this line as it is mysterious making us think what is this tale that you are now going to tell. This is the turning point of your poem and I love this point...

The throne of God abandoned,
And heaven lies in flame
*oh my goodness... How do you write so well...

As heaven lies in ruins,
And melts into the ground
*heaven is a place of bliss and perfection which is high up in the sky or said to be some where there.... Your lines tell that it is devastated and the place which is normally up above is now coming down to the ground...
.... Very strong lines here...

I love this poem. Also because I've written slightly like this maybe poem(it's there here on this site).
Your words were strong and powerful.. Made me read it thrice..
This definitely goes in my favorite's...

Wonderfully written... Keep writing...
5/5