Well, you captured the feeling of growing up really really well, and put alot of emotion into it aswell. I think you did a pretty good job on it, you had good rhymes, and most of the flow was also good. Though the first few lines I had to read a few times, 'something someone did something I saw'... But I think that may just be me, sometimes I have trouble reading *rolls eyes* so I might even come back later and find out that it really does make sense and I was just having a blonde moment..Anyway, like I tried saying at the beginning lol, Good job! I really like how you brought that feeling into a poem, simply because everyone is going to be able to connect with this one. :)

This was a good poem i liked it!. :)

Great poem, its written well. sometimes the best poems are accidental :laugh: when you dont set out to write one at all. they seem to capture your feelings better or something....not sure..

good poem though :)

This poem was wonderful. I really loved it. I am looking forward to the rest. Keep writing!! :)

Since you wrote it in your diary it's just thoughts put in rhyme.I do that too,but mine are more forced than yours:P It's nice, but you can make it better,if you watch to maintan the rythming!!But its nice anyway!

I can relate to this a lot. I was basically a happy kid growing up, but then when I hit thirteen I got depressed and that's when I started cutting myself. Now I'm 18 and still in the same position I was. Great poem!

Tiffany.xox.

Really well written peice, good expression of your thoughts and feelings