Bizarre New Land

by dollwithafrown   Jan 6, 2006


It's blacking out your eyes
Something very mystical
It's deafening your mind
Senseless and logistical
It's making you feel weak
Falling slowly to the ground
A new unfamiliar place
With a haunting surround
It's racking out your brain
Taking all that it holds
And you stare at the puzzle pieces
As everything unfolds
This new place fills your eyes
As you try to make sense
And your body starts to shake
As it's filled up with suspense
You move up slowly
You try to take a stand
Then you take in the new features
Of this bizarre new land

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  • 17 years ago

    by disturbed one

    Veddy Good...lol i like it

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Quite Unique in style. The flow was good and if you are referring to the 'new land' as your soul, What a wonderful concept. This was a really good write. Hope I interperated it right.

    Good job
    Jeannie

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I loved this.
    I thought it was really well written and the imagery was really vivid.
    I enjoyed the rhyme scheme and I loved the wording.
    One of my favourites.

  • 18 years ago

    by Darcie

    You have a very vivid way of writing. I really like it.

  • 18 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Kewlies poem! sorta makes me wonder a bit sorta....keep on writing!!

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