I wanted to comment on a poem without comments...I've read a few without and tried to pick the one I'd be most positive about. However, they all seem to be on cliche subjects (this one included) and frankly, that's not my type of poem. I prefer originality as well as correct punctuation, grammer and spelling.
So unfortunatly your style isn't for me. I'm sure other people will like it though.
Thanks for sharing.