Life of a Young Man

The story was okay, but you've had better ones. I didn't like the shorter lines, as they broke the flow of the piece, sorry.

Brad

4/5 mainly because the flow was disrupted many times, like at

Everyday of his life
People made fun of him
And every time they did
His heart darken because of them

It kinda drew away from the point and you had to add that extra 3 beats in it to make it sound good. It should go together smoothly like when you wrote

Once upon a time
In a small town
Lived a silent Young Man
Who always frowned

Besides that, good poem 4/5

Bryce

That poem reminds me of myself when i was younger.but i still like it.

Your poem is truly unique, you kept my attention well! you've done an awsum job!
luv em

Good poem! I wasn't expecting a poem like this but it was good! Keep up the amazing work!
Brittney xoxox