Thorns of a rose

Not bad, not bad at all. 'Watered with neglect'; you show promise.
If you wish, I would recommend Shædow Poet. Her writing is actually exquisite. A very enlightening read.
Till then, farewell, blood be with you.

I liked the concept of the rose and there is some stunning imagery behind it all. Tidy up a few lose ends here and there and this will blossom like a rose. Nice Stuff...

[lostlaureate - come find me]

This poem was pretty decent as the first and last lines stood out the most and where the most powerful. But there were a few grammar errors which can easily be cleared up. Also some of your line run really long ocmpared to the really short ones so it kind of throws off the flow. Try reading it outloud. It's not bad. Really all you have to do is change the length of the sentences maybe by putting long ones as two separate lines?

Except for a few grammatical errors, which are inevtible in poetry, it's pretty good. :D