Once Anonymous

by Matters   Jan 8, 2006


Just to let everyone know--I don't like this poem much...not at all. It was a Language Arts assignment, and had to be a specific topic, so...yeah.

Tales of the anonymous,
Intertwine and flow,
Riddance of the devil,
Wilt and nothing grow.

The stories, somewhat twisted,
Tell the same account,
A broken smile of paleness,
In the end, combined amount.

Look into these eyes, now,
And tell me what you see,
Just another sorrow?
A captured bird gone free?

I'll tell you this, upon my death,
I once was a young man,
Now after all the havoc,
My soul is even banned.

I have just one small hope,
The love that's in my eyes,
I'm sorry, my dear love,
I think that I have died.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Pure Silence

    Well for a hated topic and blasted project I think this is pretty damn good. Well done=) Im sorry it took me so long to comment back, Its been a long and stressful couple of weeks. Im blown away by your poetry and Look forward to more, -hugs- Keep it up Hunny

    Love always
    Jenn-aka-Pure Silence

  • 18 years ago

    by Nearly but not quite

    The first 2 stanzas were the best, but all really good, although it's possible to tell that it was kind of forced, not quite up to your usual standard, but stil a 5/5 for lack of a 4.9!
    Luv Helen xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Fadedstar

    GOOD POME
    AMAZING
    loved it!

  • 18 years ago

    by Torn

    Ok..so back again as promised..and i loved this poem all over again.
    even just what it represents..it's really sweet matt.
    How are things with you atm?
    feel like i havent talked to u in a while, which is pretty insane cos i guess we never did..
    o god..here i go, rambling on again.
    much love
    xxoxox
    PS: working on that happy poem for you..taking a while..but ill get there!!

  • 18 years ago

    by JJ

    "Look into these eyes, now,
    And tell me what you see,
    Just another sorrow?
    A captured bird gone free?"

    ^nice. you have a way with words... excellent and beautiful flow! its just something about the last stanza that doesn't seem to fit properly, frankly confusing... maybe its just me...

    keep up the good work! you truly are a talent (if you were looking for a more in depth comment, am sorry.)

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