Excellent poem. i truly loved it. keep up the good work.
**lisa**

Wow this is like one of my favortitest poems i read on here. :)
I loved it.

Very well written... keep it up!!
cari

Again the descriptive language in this piece is well used and adds to the overall effect.

Keep writing
Nici

Very effectivly written, you use of vocab and descriptions are very good.

5/5

Hey, that was a really good poem. My favourite line is:
Silver gates of a spiders weave
I thought it was very creative, not to mention the great imagery I got from it. There isn't much I would say to change, as I like it as is, but I thought I'd point out some spelling errors:
In this line:
Torturous, blackened hearts they ' possess';

Very nice