The concept is wonderful. Not sure how i feel how the same line, every other line. But it is a good poem.

Great peice. the repitition of the line though out works very well, the flow is good and the ryming does not seem forced.

5/5

This is a different poem I have read and as we say variety is the spice of life, this is cool. The repitition had a clear funtion in your poem. Thats written with creativity and a different perspective. You owe 5/5 always

Tc With love
Fsams

Amazing poem...
this is my fav out of all i read..
awesome work..
keep it up.
i can relate!!!!!