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omg hun that was such an amazing poem.
Babe you are awesome, your skills just keep on growing.
this is such a true poem..i want to broadcast it everywhere so that maybe it would change the attitude of just a few people..itd be worth it.
I love ya babe..take care xoxooxxoxo

Oh my gosh, I don't see how this poem could get any better, hun. It's so beautiful and filled with emotion and confusion... wow... I don't even know what to say! You wrote this poem PERFECTLY which is hard to do. Keep up the excellent writing!

It's pure genious and it's the truth!! let it be known that there is more to life, the n just black and white