Rotten To The Core

by Ashleigh Skye   Jan 11, 2006


If my soul was a building,
I'll tell you how it'd be,
hidden beneath lengths of ivy,
resting in the shade of a tree.

The property would be beautifully kept,
and the ivy would be in full bloom,
but deep inside the mysterious house,
many dark shadows would loom.

The floor boards would squeak in agony,
while the lights would flicker non-stop,
dust and clutter would be everywhere,
from torn carpets, to sticky old bottles of pop.

Animals would be running ramped,
from birds and raccoons to rodents alike,
gnawing away at the interior,
causing the number of holes to spike.

There would be huge gouges in the floor,
from people who once ran through,
everything would be falling apart,
but outside it would look brand new.

Shattered mirrors in every room,
dark paintings in every hall,
but no one will ever know,
because upon them no light will fall.

All the doors would be locked,
and no one would see the mess within,
no one would hear the dripping of the tap,
or see the rugs worn thin.

If my soul was a building,
the outside would stand tall,
but deep inside the concrete walls,
the whole place would be starting to fall.

But by fixing up the outside,
people stop and admire with a grin,
oblivious to the piece of cement,
that suddenly dropped within.

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PLZ COMMENT AND VOTE THANX

this is full of metaphores so you have to look deeper to get the message that I'm trying to send

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  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Metaphorically, you're poem was like the house in your poem. . . Nice. Wear the fake smile, but through it is pain. Write a great poem - but perhaps the writer sees it as a little more... Aboslutely amazing poem, great flow, rhymes, words, stanza's and a very powerful ending.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by *~vixen~*

    I loved reading beetween the lines on this one. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Little Dot

    Amazing work. This poem was very creative and different. It was really well written.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lu

    I think you have done a wonderful piece . I really did enjoy reading it. Very unique.
    Thank you for your feedback on my poem .....silly rhyming ...not alot of people would think it is funny unless they were in the coffee,conversation&poetry group of which I am.....the poem was about my fellow members . Honesty is the best policy......

  • 18 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Oh, wow! that was an excellent poem! so much emotion. i can relate fully. great job hun, stay strong.
    **lisa**