A Dream

by The Poetic Child   Jan 11, 2006


I lost Control
of my body and soul
as i made a mistake
so the punishment i take
as my head gets dizzy
my head starts to shake
im light headed and drunk
in my head theres an earthquake
i did something wrong
as my heart that was strong
became weak
and meek
but i slept with another girl
just took it for a twirl
my mind was thinking
but the level was sinking
my head just started shrinking
some how the news got to my wife
she said it was over
im out of her life
she threatned if i was any closer
she'd cut me with the knife
the tears
and fears
ran down her face
and left a trace
she lost her breath
her breath started to chase
she couldnt breath
but i had to leave
she fell on ther ground
so i left with no sound
i began to cry
as i thought back and why
and why this happend
as my friends start laughing
i couldnt take no more
i layed on the floor
this mistake
that i had to take
even though it was fake
it happend
i pulled out a gun
and put to my head
thought i had nothing just better to be dead
i loaded the clip
and bit my lip
and called my wifes phone
as i lost my tone
and said if this is what she wanted
she can have it cuz regretion just haunted
and haunted
me,
so now she can see
the love i have was real
but theres nothing left for her to feel
i pulled the trigger and shot..

Then i wake up in bed
as my head,
was in a dread
i got up and went to my wife
told her how muched i loved her
and i will all my life
told her i missed her
i told her as i kissed her..

Please comment and vote, i would love to hear on what you have to say....Thank you so much

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  • 18 years ago

    by FoundHim

    This was a very depressing poem but an excellent one no doubt...the end was kinda confusing to me tho but i really loved this poem and really got into it...i love all of your poems i say again and again but its true...keep it up and thanks for all your comments!
    ~Sandra~

  • 18 years ago

    by nO1cOmPaReS2yOu

    This is incredible. You just have a way with words.... don't ever quit writing.
    I think I sent you an e-mail but I'm not exactly sure. lol.

  • 18 years ago

    by Justin

    Actually good poem,

    the story behind it is quite heart wrenching and sad, but the end is a bit confusing, to add in some critisizm(sp?) I would have to say
    to try and add in a few more words in some of the lines so it would flow better,

    When writing poetry the same amount of sylables (sp?) just sound alot better together when they are equal in my opinion..

    A stupid example:

    The cat was red,
    and dead,

    or

    The cat was red,
    and almost dead,

    The second one appears to flow much better in my opinion, but that is just my opinion. I really did enjoy this poem though, and I think you did a good job. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by LyricalFlow

    That was brilliant, i loved the rhyming in it, it kinda hits you when u read it.
    Excellent poem 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by coupon can

    Thats so sweet...i love that poem...ur an awesome poet...keep writin...laters