With blood the body's lotion
((This should read, if I read it right:
with blood - the body's lotion))

Otherwise I really liked the poem.. It was strong and confident and very dark. And it wasn't something you hear everyday. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

I loved this one as well.
it was so dark and powerful, and as always, I enjoyed your rhyme scheme and use of imagery.
Keep up the good work, another 5/5 from me.
xx

You write amazing dark poems. I love this. I ususally choose which stanzas I love the best and... I love them all! You are amazing! You vocabulary and your rhyming is something for me to envy.

Excellent
5/5

A few lil things-
with blood the body's lotion
there needs to be a break after blood.(comma)

Scattered across this floor,
the heart I never did love.
I always wanted more,
and you, I got sick of.
it seems to me that this rhyme was slightly forced. it did nto flow as well as the rest.
what i liked- i lovedthe metaphors and descriptions and language in this one. it was amazing(except^)
i loved this part here-
Eros your arrows are cursed,
pierce my skin and hit my heart.
For her touch I now thirst,
upon my lips her poison dart.

it just was. amazing.

Great Job. =]

x3 Lauren

I love this poem. Very dark!