In Memory Of

by Tessa   Jan 14, 2006


Where'd you go
You were just here
I used to love to hear you singing in my ear

But where'd you go
I saw you go
But I don't know where you are

And I hope that you are there
Watching over the fair
And I hope to see you again

Mary

*Mary was my aunt who died last year. I wanted to let out my feelings some how and i thought of this. She was a great woman, a talented artist and dare devil, she taught me how to paint, water ski and mountain climb and I want her to be remembered.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Vegetable

    Well the major complaint I have about this poem is the rhyme. It seems like you have the mind-set of "I need to rhyme" But rhyming is one of those hail mary passes it either compliments if done right or compleatly slaughters the poem. The rhymes you used sound forced and awkward, and It really kills it if you use the same word in your rhyme like you did in the 2nd stanza. Beyond that it's a little blunt. When you say "I used to love to hear you singing in my ear" I have to take your word for it. If you were to show me that you loved it by saying something like "when you sang to me it was like the rainbow after a storm, filling me with a sence of comfort" or however it made you feel. The raw feelings you displayed are a great start, this has potential to be great.

  • 18 years ago

    by xXsebastianXx

    Excellent i loved the way you let your feelings out keep it up

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