Velvet divorce.

I'm picking up the mess you've made
listening to how we were mistake < should this be we were a mistake? without the word a in there it kinda loses people a bit or at least makes it unnecessarily choppy.
i don't no how much more i can possibly brake
how much more i can even take

why do you do this to me < did you mean to put a question mark here like later in the piece
its like you slit me open and make me bleed
the check my pulse and pray for me to breath
you lead me on and let go effortlessly

like when you catch me right before i fall to the floor
watch me desperately cry till i cant take anymore

You have my heart tied onto the thinest string
you watch it sway
and watch it swing
waiting to see what the future brings

will it fall, or be okay?
i don't like the games you play
my feelings wouldn't matter anyway..

so you can just break me...
cause i know you wont accept or take me
you'll tare me apart
and this time ill fall so hard
my insides will shatter, along with my heart

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Oh so sad but filled with emotion.GREAT JOB!
Tisha~

Wow beautiful ! its very well said i love it-xxx-

*gasp* i just realized something!! you and me kinda look alike!! hehe yay! my hair is almost the same as yours now!!! *dances around* dgalkshg;aslkghakj!! oh me so happy!!!! hehe i love you girl! mwah!

love,
sam

Oh my god sabrina!! i haven't talked to you in ages!!!! i love you girllll!!! i missed you!!! lovely poem, it was very descriptive, which your always so good at!!! i love you sooo much!! mwahh!!! we gotta talk sometime hun! mwah!

love,
sam