Although I dont like peotry that doesnt rhyme, thi sone was really deep. you really d ohave some talent.

Very deep peice.

This was beautiful. i felt your insecurity as you humbly admiotted that you have no power over your life, and that god is in total control. you are the example of a broken and contrite heart.
i cant even think of anything that was wrong in your writing. the structure, the overall grammer is perfect. believe me if i had critisism to give i would give cause i expect the same from whomever reads mine.
so with all honesty you have developed a well written honest style.
always be the same way with yourself. keep your heart open in the way you expressed.

one more "I LOVE IT" okay i'm gone,
phil :)

I love that poem, its realy touching. the passion and belief just shines through....beautiful, very well done!
take care
xx xx xx

Loved it!!!!!

This poem is awesome, it seems as if you just open up your heart and lay it out all in your writing. Keep it up!

Br0ken x iinsid3

Great Job Wow....Even withouth the rhyme you make this poem shine Greatly....Raelly Really Really Nice...my only advice try to make into like a stanza thing, some people hating readint it because they thinks its like a story, i personally think its time but there are some hardcore critiquer peaople out there. just helpin u out, great job though 5/5

So true...deeep and real...wonderfully expressed

This is a really greAT poem I hope you will keep on writing them because you are awesome at it.

Thank You