Eternal Sleep

by Allison   Jan 16, 2006


This pain is to much
I wish it would end
My life is horrible
The blade is my friend

As it presses against my flesh
It creates a cavern so deep
It allows the red waters to flow
Casting me into an eternal sleep

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  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Another great poem, Lol im so glad you won the contest, Cause your now in my favourites. And i absoloutly LOVE reading your work, Your very talented :P

    5/5 for this one though, Like i said in the last one, It was short, But filled with alot of emotion!!

    luv natalie x-x

  • 18 years ago

    by AJ

    I agree with Kristen, you should add onto it. It seems as though there should be more in the middle. Keep up the good work though. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha

    Wow this was so amazing.. it was so sad but written so well... nice write most definetly a five out of five... take care and keep it up

    sammie

  • 18 years ago

    by enfant du tordu chagrin

    Nice, short and, well not sweet, but very good lol. Nice poem, with a good structure and nice lyrical flow. Well Done, nice Job!

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Really good, deep and full of feeling

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