Hmmm...... with my fractured german i dont think i can apretiate this to its full potential. however, from what i can understand it seems to be a good peice. i am having a bit of trouble understanding the first line.... though this is proabally due to my reading rather than your writting lol.

i sort of feel as if i shouldn't have read it... as if it's a personal message to someone...

anyway. from what i understoo dof it a good peice.

sorry... but cannot really rate it as i cannot read it all and so judge it propally.