by David McIntosh Jan 17, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
Every time you touch me |
by Jessica
That was amazing. i wish that more people thought of love that way and less just used you. you captured the emotion greatly. keep writing for it will never fail you and i wish you luck on your love. 5/5 love jess~ |
This is really beautiful, what a grand love poem.I especially like the part about taking for granted-too often we take things for granted, I know I learned that lesson the hard way and lost the only one I've ever truly loved.Never take anything or anyone for granted-Love, like happinesss, is revocable.This is truly sweet.Though in the last line 'your' should be 'you're', (just a minor technocality).It works great as it is, but I can't help but feel it could be expanded on a bit in parts, just my opinion.Great work.Very touching. |