For my uncle... untitled

by *Sweet as your worst nightmare*   Jan 19, 2006


Uncle Curtis
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As the years pass
The days seem longer
Your daughters grown up
Your sons messed up
Everyone misses you
I cry at the thought of you.
The world hasnt been the same
Since that day 8 years ago

The dwelling thought
of following you
wont leave my mind

you haunt me constnatly
your soul it calls me
your love it morns for me
a father you were to me
but you cannot return
i miss you forever
a thought always...

Your daughter shes pregnant
Your sone hes happy
they havent gotten over you
their world isnt the same

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  • 18 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Thats better :) yes yes yes, but there are still spelling and grammer mistakes, i wont list them all as im sure u can spot them yourself if u read through it.

    not sure wots going on with the first two lines...are they part of the poem???

    there are some lines which sort of go together in pairs, if you know what i mean (eg.Your daughters grown up/Your sons messed up)
    this is a nice effect and works well

    -biscuit-

  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    This is sad... I'm sorry your Uncle passed away, he seemed like a great guy... and the fact that I can get that just from that poem means a lot.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    I agree it jumps around alot but it must mean something to you. I'd just clean up the few misspelled words and it should be fine. :)

  • 18 years ago

    by PS

    Hmm this is good, some of the thoughts seem to jump around a bit, but i like the first and third stanzas.

  • 18 years ago

    by xDryTearsx

    This poem is so touching and amazing poem so heartfelt i loved it so much great job

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