I liked it. I think a good title for it would be Powerless because thats how the character is described. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

I liked this poem very much. The diction was accurate, and you have created successful images. It also flowed with elegance, which is great. Well done!

Great poem. really well written

i am not great at titles... but some thing like

prisoner
traped
prisoner of her own mind
powerless (as has been suggested)

Excellent imagery and perfect ending.

I wrote a short story with a similar theme but its a bit too long to go on this website!! i like the rhythm of this poem,its quite fast and really flows well xkimx

I disagree with the title I don't think you should give away the ending in the title. The whole time your reading the poem you feel as if it is a dream but you can't quite tell for sure until the end ( which was a good ending) If you put the mind in the title then you will know she is dreaming so it wouldn't be a surprise ending But i really did enjoy the poem and also thank you so very much for entering in my contest.

I liked the ending. i didnt expect it. the stanzas were a bit rocky, in the sense that they didnt all match up. you would rhyme in the first and third line in soem and not the others. it makse it a lil choppy but it still worked. good job.

Orginal and haunting. The perfect elements of a dark poem. The images are really vivid, or maybe that's my over imagination, and the feeling is so...wow this poem was just brilliant.

Wow thats different. i really like it. its haunting and the last line is fabulous. nice job!

I love the ending, it was so unexpected.
beautiful.
: )
thank you
~Em

WOW, real powerfull.. unfortunatly, for some, its all too true