Solitude

by Melissa S. Masucci   Jan 23, 2006


Even as I step out of this door, and walk away forever
I know you'll never let me go

At one time there were smiles, infectious and fun
I wanted to be in the moment, I wanted it to last forever
We saw the future through the same eyes
It was going to be beautiful

As the darkness of life drew in, you left with the light
The smiles faded, bonds broke
The love in my eyes died

Long before I walked away, my heart was already gone
I made a mistake, I should have left you sooner
I should have said goodbye to the cold whites of your eyes
Instead of waiting for the opportune moment

My friend, I cared so much
But in the end you won't remember the times I cared
Only the times I failed

Even while in the arms of another, you still pine for me
You search for that connection that is already gone
Because I'm leaving, and I'm not coming back
In a room full of people you're always alone.

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  • 18 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Wow...i loved this...you put so much emotion in it!

  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I'm pretty sure I like rhyming poems better for they're easier to make flow though harder to write, but I for some reason really liked this. I'm not sure why, but it just stuck out to me. Great job.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 18 years ago

    by Kara !

    This is sad, but also quite inspirational, that the character did leave in the end.

    I love the structure you've used. It's so varied, which makes it interesting.

    "At one time there were smiles, infectious and fun"

    And that line I love. We all reminisce of good times, but the reality is always there.

    Great work. x

  • 18 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    In both of the poems I've read so far you used the metaphor of being alone in a crowded room, but you used them to convey a different message in each, and I liked that. I think this poem was great, and I really enjoyed reading it, it had a style all it's own, and it rang true to me. great job, 5/5

    Ravyn

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "My friend, I cared so much
    But in the end you won't remember the times I cared"
    I didn't like the repitition of 'cared' here, I thought it was too close together to be beneficial to the poem.

    The poem was a lot about emotion, and very little about rhythm or rhyming, which is fine. I'm glad that there were plenty of details, because details are what it is all about when it comes to poems that might otherwise be cliche. Without details or a unique topic, what the heck are poems anyhow? Good work.

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