It was ok thought you could add more to it. *4/5*

Haha sadly i'm not THAT advanced it writing it dif kinds of...idk...uh...stuff....lol i just write what comes to my mind, what i'm feeling, and how it comes out. i dont really worry about what type of poem it is, like sonnets and stuff... but i guess this is good lol. i dont exactly know how this kind of poem is supposed to be written.

Beautifully written. the last two lines were my favourite!! yay!!! 5/5....i will have to try an etheree sometime...i'm sick of writing free-verse...very good first attempt! 5/5

love,
sam