A Shattered Heart.....

I rated this a 4/5 because there were a few parts that could have been tweaked a little to improve them a lot. For example, neither of the last two sentences need commas. Also, the last line didn't make sense--proofread it and you might see why.
"They can shatter our hearts.
And rip it in two with the things they do."
This could be changed to have better rhythm: They can shatter our hearts and rip them in two
with the things they say and the things they do."
Consider the changes; they could improve the poem from a four to a five. ;)

I can relate to this so well .
This is sad, and amazing . So much emotion .
This poem is so true .
..ღ__MiNDYY

If I read this I would not think it was a poem unless I knew, it sounds more like something you'd put in the forum!!
idea is great, but how it's written and the word use brings irt down! 3/5

Thats very true!!!
our heart are always vulnerable to the ones we love... its cos we trust in them...
very true
keep it up!
i liked it alot

True that is sooooo true. i've been through that and its the worst of all pains...

Great poem!!