I must say I'm impressed.I love the use of 'archaic' language/style, you make it flow smoothly and natural sounding so that it doesn't detract from the message and images.I also like that there is a slight ambiguity, allowing a more open interpretation to each reader.Mainly it is just worded so beautifully and constructed so well.I'll definitely be back to check out more of your work soon.Excellent poem, truly.

EOB,

Onion man my friend, I must say that this is most impressive. A new masterpiece.

Best regards,

Steve