Quite excellent its a good dipiction of what society really is and how it really does mold us all sorta eh either way amazing poem your very good
~jacob

OMG! You are VERY smart. You definitely tackled this issue with the most sensitive words! You have such talent.

Great. somes it all up amazingly. 6/5.
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~All of this draws to a close as my eyelids become heavy
and darkness fills my concious shy
I am falling into a sleep for which I look forward to every day
as it is this place where my dream was born and where it will never die~

I wish my thoughts could be put into words. Beautiful words, made into sentences that bring poetry together. Your writing is truly a treat to read. Im so glad God gave you the talent of writing:D

~Always4You~