I like this!
its working well, but i think that "the" is used far too much to start a sentence.

but other than that, its flawless!

Ok emma, i'll be honest with you coz we are friends and it's my job. i'm very jealous of your amazing talent in writing poetry. thought you should know : ) this is another wonderful poem. cya wednesday,
Suzie
xox

A great peice. it really captures the reader at the beginging and maintains this interest thoughout.

5/5