I do like it very much. The only thing I would do is cut down on using the world I so much. It fit well in the first stanza but you should try to get some of them out in the other stanza's (not all of them though, just a few). Very good, ^_^

Keep up the good work,
Tony

Wow.. j lau.. i have read several of your poems in the contest.. all are well writen.. i like this one the most,becos i can relate it to my feeling.. keep your good job.. take care.. :)

This made me cry. :'( this was beautiful. it reminds me of a certain time in my life. let me kkow if u care to hear the story. 5/5. great job.

Aw..It sounds like the person she was dating, she broke up with him, And The other guy was there to comfort her. Anywho, Great poem, Loved it 5/5

- natz x0x

Aw that's sweet. I really liked it. Keep up the good work =]

- natz x0x

Thats a really unique style - loving the structure of the poem - keep it up :)

Peace. [Sole]

Awesome job. I loved it. The Flow and structure of the Poem is wonderfully put together.

Sad and sweet, nice work

Very sweet and very sad.. good job on that! nice structure and a nice poem! 5/5

Aww so sad, yet so sweet. I love poems like that!! I really have nothing to say about this one except you did a great job!

Cayce x

Well writen, full of emotion.

Beautifully written. You put a lot of emotion into this, amazing job. I loved this part the best:

Far away from this lonely place,
Across the ocean where I will gaze.
How I wish that you will stay,
But wishing you well is all I pray.
When you come back healed and well,
Please don't forget this lonely heart,

Great rhyming, the beginning really sucked me in.

Excellent.

5/5

The stanzas were a little unorganized, but other then that it was great. *5/5*

Alyson

P.S.
Keep up the good work

This is a very sad yet beautiful poem. I know these feelings very well. it is so hard to carry on without love. The emptiness of your heart and soul can be felt in everyword.
Great job! 5.5

This is my favorite of yours so far. I think that your opening lines were powerful and let me know kind of what to expect from your poem. It was very well put together, and it told such a sad and sweet story at the same time. wonderful job. 5/5

Awww!!
Please don't forget this lonely heart,
Who wished you well
From the bottom of his heart.
they were the lines that really got me, that was sweet. i can almost feel your yearning. chin up

much love and many kisses,
bex

This is a very nice piece, I am falling in love with all of your poetry! You used a great free-verse style, and it flowed very nicely. 5/5

I liked this peice. it was very sad yet comforting and full of happiness at the same time, if that makes any sence to you. The only thing I wasnt a big fan of was the rhyme scheme seemed to change now and again throughout the poem and it was kind of odd sounding. The last two lines were my favorite for the completely summed up the poem. nice job.

Awww sooo sweet.... I loved the good choices of words becasue it showed that you had a really good creative side of you and I hope you never stop writing.... because that is what makes u... good job and keep u p the good work