I really like this...

Reminds me of someone i know

Nice piece, it almost sounds sad to me, as if you are in love with this person almost against your will. I think repeating some of the ideas worked well and I quite liked the line 'beauty dressed in rags' it stood out to me. Well done :)

You freakin' rock.

WOW!!..u get better by the poems...this isi amazing...i love it..different kind of poem..i love it!! bbe ur amazing..stay strong

luv ya lots