My True Feelings

Brillaintly written peice, well portrayed and great use of vocab within

5/5

I can semi-relate to this poem too, and what a lovely poem! I think you are definately going on my favourites list!!

Peace. [Sole]

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Good work but I think the flow of the poem would be alot easy going if you broke it up more.
Something like this maybe..?:

I always did hang out with you,
always goofed around.
But when you looked into my eyes,
I'd gaze down at the ground.

I couldn't bear it anymore,
this burden was too much.
So when we would just play around, you I'd try to touch.

Sometimes you would just laugh harder, sometimes you didn't care, When I would just sit and play with your long, black hair.

Now I'm coming out to you,
I know this was never meant to be,
Thats why I'm hanging on this rope, holding this note, that holds..

My True Feelings.

Maybe something on the lines of that?
I dont mean to change your work setup but just a thought Im giving to you to think about. Great work over all
Juls