Barriers

by VioletRaven   Jan 28, 2006


What happened to my heart of stone?
My will and wish to be alone?
Within these castle walls I keep,
My inner beauty deep in sleep,
Surrounded by a cage of thorns
Protect my heart from a world of wrongs.

My barriers against the world are strong,
They held so fast, and lasted long,
I'm afraid to let them go,
To be hurt and lost in endless sorrow,
I want to let you in, so bad,
But to think you'd care about me seems mad.

I'd love to think you'd break them down,
No more I'll cry, no more I'll frown,
No more I'll lock my heart away,
Your words will get me through the day.
These scars and cuts will fade and heal,
Pain no longer will I feel.

This fantasy, though, it isn't real,
Self-inflicted pain is all I feel.
If I let you in, you'd turn on me,
Make me hate both you and me,
I feel confusion tearing me apart,
I wanted you to see me from the start,
But lonely and invisible I will stay,
If you don't see me that way...

*Written on 7th November 2005*

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  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Brilliantly written. it flows very well and the content is fantastic.

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by President Dead

    Great poem, content was good, but not a fan of that rhyme pattern, but again a great poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by Cuddles

    This is me without the self-inflicted pain part. Incedible poem! I love the conflict of the heart and brain. The heart wants to let him in. The brain says he'll hurt you. It's awesome.

  • 18 years ago

    by DBM

    Wow! Great poem! The feelings are extremely strong. Sorry I haven't talked to you in so long. Shoot me an email if you have time.

    XD

  • 18 years ago

    by The Wingless

    Once again, I am blown away by a wonderful piece of work. I really enjoy the rhymes, it's nice to see, every once and a while, rhymes that aren't forced and that go together well, I know it is hard to rhyme but for those people who have trouble rhyming, a poem doesn't have to rhyme... Anyways, your rhymes were perfect, the rhyming scheme was awesome.

    There is one set of rhymes, if they are, that I found though, so I finally get to help you,

    wrongs and strong,

    yes they rhyme but wrongs ends in an s, it sort of takes away from the rhyme.

    Please keep up the good work, and this is a really good ending:

    This fantasy, though, it isn't real,
    Self-inflicted pain is all I feel.
    If I let you in, you'd turn on me,
    Make me hate both you and me,
    I feel confusion tearing me apart,
    I wanted you to see me from the start,
    But lonely and invisible I will stay,
    If you don't see me that way...

    Thank you for sharing this poem,

    I really have a lot to think about now.

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