Standing among the betrayed

by coupon can   Jan 29, 2006


Standing among the betrayed
Becoming one of them
Eyes filled with hatred and heartache
Resentful hearts everywhere you turn

Feeling worthless and empty
Betrayed and hopeless
Learning to deal with this
This pain, this hate

Beautiful fairytale dreams don't exist
Time goes by, but the heartache doesn't
You're not here, I'm not there
We're not together, we will never be

Screaming into the emptiness
I miss you my lover,I fuc.king miss you
But you're the reason
I'm now standing among the betrayed

*Not my best, i was kinda tired while writing this so i know it sucks, if u have any ideas on how to make it better plz comment and let me know*

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  • 18 years ago

    by last_petal

    This a very good poem... a reader can really relate on this one and it has mixed emotions.......

  • 18 years ago

    by myxlittlexcut

    This is a good poem
    *** just an idea that might make it alittle better, you should consider finding other words for the word "betrayed" so that that word wont seem over used by the end line, because in my opion that line is so powerful and it could stand out more it you dont say "betrayed" so much before hand

    you did a good job on this poem though

  • 18 years ago

    by Pilar

    The ending was so sweet

    "But you're the reason
    I'm now standing among the betrayed"

    i can relate with this one, great piece of work.

    remember the text y e mailed to ckr? well i posted it with a different format, a little edited here
    it's like very long so no one will comment on it hehe but i don't care

    byee

    ms. battery

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