I liked it. i liked how you used some dramatization! 9sorry if i spelled it wrong!) N-E-WAYZ! Thanx for the comment on my poem, and the answer to your question is my teacher was talking about how her son was going of to war, and how he got injured. So i brought out a peice of paper, and my pencil and i wrote down my thoughts! But you being 16 and going off to war? I have known a few courageus people, but none a can say went to war! Well, i am proud that a poet is going to war! Be careful, and come back in one peice so that i can read some more of your poems! 5/5 KEEP IT UP!

I like it, and thnks for the comment. And thanks for what you said, i do need to pick someone and start over.....lol

Once again! Very nice and different. Write this poem thinkin of yourself? The pheonix shall always rule.