I like these two parts the most, I found them to have perfect flow and narration.

Love tears me apart, and throws me to the river
Hell beckons for me to stand at its gate

Turn out of the graveyard, not alone
Conscious remembered, pressing at my back

Those are awesome!

I like this poem it's great, if you could just increase the length....

Uhh, I think the ending is a little weak and that the poem is cut short though.

Other than that good job.

If you weren't already in my favo(u)rites I would have put you there now.

Heehee, Tay well done dude! -was gonna call you hun out of habit but you dont like it lol- I agree with mike the endings.. well to be harsh the endings kinda sucky lol it doesnt give the poem a feeling of...well a just ending you know? or am I completly nuts? lol Keep it up =)

Love Jenn

Hey Taylor, I was reading some of your poems and I liked this one the
best. the title is good. and one can
imagine the atmosphere when they read it. so, that was really amazing.
and I liked this part the best which says:
Take a walk through the lifeless streets I call home
Turn into the empty graveyard, all alone

may you be happy,
marjan
it.