by fallen princesa Jan 30, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Is it really love, does he really have your heart, you cant stand it when your apart, why cant you let him go? maybe you can tell me why im never the first to know, i really dont understand why, you cant stop makin lie, i feel powerless, im on the floor, im on my knees, knockin at his door, youve reached my dreams, hauntin my every thought, maybe im no better than you, but i didnt get caught, that maybe cruel thing to say, but at the end of the day my guilt makes me pay, at least you can admit it to his face, now i know wat its like to be in your place, your lie lasted six months,mine will go on forever, im not goin anywhere so get use to me im your new best friend...!!! |
Hmmm this is an interesting poem. I didn't like it at first, but it kind of grew on me as I kept reading it. It feels like you message, the thing you are trying to say is there, but a bit covered up by you want to rhyme. I don't know if that makes any sense. It is not a bad poem, just remember that not all poems need to rhyme like that. Still a good job. |