Hey holli, listen everyone has bad poems, but dont stop writing poems. u can and u will get better. i liked ur poem. just please dont stop writing. luv cali

Thank you and I shall. I appreciate you viewing my poem.

Never Let Them Take You Alive!!

-Holli

Because I was writing what I feel at the moment of writing this poem, I wasnt too concerned about what format I was putting it in. Good to know there are other people out there that felt the same way as I did when I wrote it. Thanks for the comment and I shall keep writing.

I like this poem, and your expressing yourself really well, but the format made it hard to read and at first sight I just wanted to hide. Otherwise, very good poem.

Don't stop writing, IT DOES NOT SUCK! You expressed yourself and your pain in a very good way. I am sorry you are in so much pain, keep on hanging on tight. you will get through this, there is HOPE!
Take kare,
Paula

Holli, Im sure this has a great message, but personally I had to stop half way through, because the format was too bulky. Maybe just space it out a bit and structure it into stanzas, and I can promise this will be a stunning peice =)

Im sorry fi I sound harsh but sugar coating gets us no where right?

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Thank you. I have just spaced it out in an effort to make it look not so "bulky". Thank you very much for the advice!!

Lol, Its wonderful now hunn Keep it up:)

I liked it. Kind of neat how you referred to to your family and friends as "medicine for you disease". Good job.
~Jaime

Thank you very much everyone for the advice and comments!!!