I liked this dark, and bewitching poem, brad seriously. i liked the way u alternated between rhymes. imagery was very clear, and im sure any vampires reading this would say, u described their life down to a T. well done son.
so do i still owe u £2.50 after this comment? lol!!!!:-)

Luvd it, i luvd da beginning but nw its finishd, its even betta. i dnt fink id lyk 2 b a vampire, da bitin, fine, only out at night, fine but da not drinkin nefin, def.not fine!!
but NEway da poem wos brilliant n filled wit a real sense of sadness and loss of all da fings dat make us human really, im glad u finally got ova da writers block, I bin waitin 4 u 2 write suttin new cs I lve readin ur work.
Love you,
Beth xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

That was so awsome. I loved the way that it flowed and what it said. You have alot of talent. *5/5*

This is one of the greatest vampire poem!!! I LOVE to read anything that has vampire's in it and your now my#1
poet! Your talent is beyond anything
keep it up!

Wow im not much on fantasy writings i must say but wow this is well. . . . . in lack of a better word. . perfect! the flow is great and the words you've used just fit. I really like it. . .i wasn't dissin on the fantasy writes i just havn't ever taken the time to actually sit down and write one. But again perfect and you have my vote 5/5 and i'm on my way to see that "When" one
thanks
check out my work sometime
~*~Amber~*~

I love the way you bring it to a climax of known "new"ances. lol. I like your style, and thanks for the coment on my poem "It's you, but".

Hey keep it rolling

holla

joe

I liked it a lot, made me smile (kinda freaky, lol)! 5/5

-Taylor

Hey, haven;t read your stuff in a while.. actually i haven't been on this in a while..another fantastic poem..5. check out some of my stuff if you have time, thanks. Amy x

Really good. you can feel how trapped the vampire is. loved it.

Wow...5/5

Mallori

I love this......the writing style is amazing....the wording and desriptions are great....very well written

This is a great poem...and like i said i have read all of yours..you can believe me....i like them all and i think you are a great writer.... and thanks for the comment....

Very intresting, you must know alot about Vampires to write something so exquisit. that is true most Vampires live like that, but the ones who enjoy being what they are may disagree, so there for i would have to disagree. yet it is a wonderful poem captavating the truth behind our lives.

Lady Meagan

MOOOH HAHAHA! i love it! i love "Vampires" theres a reallyy good book called Twilight and the 2nd book to that one called New Moon! i think youll like it.. your poem is amazing!great job! =]

Great word flow. Nice imagedry.

That was great- though this line "food nor wine cannot satisfy" contradicts itself, unless i read it wrong, lol- i LOVE vampire stories, that was a wonderful poem!

Whoa. this literally gave me chills. amazingly well written. i really love it a lot, great job. 5/5

Your rhyming worked, but it wasnt as good as i thought it would be. just didn't flow.

I am in love with this poem. I only wish I was one.... You write beautifully....

I LOVE THIS POEM!!!!! it really reminds me of the vampire one i wrote but, my favorit part was the last two lines wow oh wow great read its in my favorits now