Excellent job....fantastic flow...Great rhyme...Great Detail..you got the whole package in there...Excellent job |
by Moose
Pretty good..... but it looks like a WIP (work in progress) not saying its bad but it seems like you could probably get more out of this than you already have put in... With what was in there though you expressed plenty of emotion and played out the story very well |
by Just_Andrew
Good ! |