Great piece.I can really feel the pain, sadness, despair all fading into an emptiness.The rhyme scheme is a bit off in a couple spots, but regardless this still has a good flow to it and what is overpowering is the way you convey the emotions by how you say it.Fantastic job.A very touching piece.

Awww..dont worry hun, keep your chin up! this was a very sad poem, there was a lot of emotion oozing out! great job! 5/5